Divergent Love
For I will
love you forever and always
Into the
deeps of love we shall soar
In vein I
searched for love in every hallway
All walls of
insecurities came crashing, finally happiness ive never felt before
Every
sentimental moment we encountered
You amplify
every soft spoken aspiration with a kiss
Every
embracing hug, I put my feelings on the counter
Inseparable
we are for I will never flag a dismiss
As I reminisce on our inaugural cuddling
Every battle
we fight we became a dynamic dual
The way we
fell in love was beautifully puzzling
Engaging
open hearted sharpened my confidence like an edge tool
Together we
give each other endorsement for I am thankful
But be
careful my love without god our love will grow feverishly hasteful
16 comments:
This is a good piece and I feel like you said this in class so good job.
-Kamau O
-P.2
This poem was very detailed and was strong with passion. Good job!
~Mia Tolliver
period 2
This poem was strong, i liked how you used the ABAB rhyme scheme to express your love for God. The diction you used to describe your love by using words such as reminiscent and sentimental. It gives an imagery of how love should be and how you feel towards it. In all, great poem!
This is an incredible piece of work. First off, I like how you chose to do a poem, as many of these blog entries are not. This definitely grabbed my attention from the get-go. Second, I am not all that religious, but despite this, I really liked how you ended your poem by essentially saying that you and your loved one not only need each other, but faith in god as well. I also loved how that tied into the title at the last minute. Lastly, I noticed the structure of your poem was very well organized and well thought out. Amazing entry!
-nate shepard p.1
The expression of love you used was just breath taking. Your poem was very well written with heart felt emotion, I hope you continue to work on improving your writing.
-Jobelle Dauz
Period 2
Great sonnet! I don't know how you fit every syllable and followed the rhyme scheme, that is true talent!
Josie Starr
Period 2
in this quote, "You amplify every soft spoken aspiration with a kiss
Every embracing hug, I put my feelings on the counter", so you are trying to say that whenever something is very sad you can fix everything with a kiss and somewhat put your feelings in a list? I understood it a little bit but I think its just me since I don't realy get love sonnets. good job
-Isaac Garcia
6 per
Great job! I really like how you wrote this piece! Your work put a smile on my face! I was very impressed at how you managed to put all the words you did and you still met the rhyme scheme. You're a true poet!
Awww I love this! First of all i would like to commemorate you for writing a poem because personally, poems are hard for me to write so good job on that. I loved the words you used and the details you input into it. It put a smile on my face and reminded me of that special someone in my life :)
i can tell you put alot of that passion stuff into this piece its really good. You should continue writing poems and keep improving good job!
Andrew Hernandez
Period 2
Wow this was great! This seems like it came straight from the heart and I am impressed by the beauty that you were able to put down onto paper. Keep writing and who knows what will come. Great Job!
Nehemiah Barnett
Period 4
Truly a great piece, it felt as though it really came from the heart. The structure made it easy to follow, great job.
Sara Arredondo
period1
Very nice poem with a lot of passion. good job!
Joseph Mendez
per.2
The ending was great the way that I could feel the emotion of the story was breath taking. Great job over all !!
Great poem! i like the emotion and passion you put into it.
Awesome poem, im very fond of poem makers, this is a great piece of art! Especially since it gives off that passionate feeling.
- Ricky Martin
- Period 4
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