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Monday, April 13, 2015

"Becoming an 'Adult'” By Sophia B


     If anyone else has had their parent(s) or other adult tell them, “You are eighteen now, you should be acting more like an adult and being more responsible,” then you understand the difficulty and frustration that comes along with turning the joyful age of eighteen. Eighteen is the age where we can buy lottery tickets, legally drive friends, vote, attend jury duty, and be tried as an adult in court. It is also the age where we are expected to make impactful life decisions that can either aid or hinder our future goals. For example, making the decision of what college to attend or to even attend college at all, and choosing what we want to do for the rest of our lives. To our society, the age of eighteen is perceived as a pleasant and memorable time in one’s life in which one will begin a “new chapter” and begin to figure things out. According to Merriam-Webster dictionary, an adult is someone who is fully grown, developed, mature and sensible; meaning that they cannot be childish or show any child-like behavior. Then there are parents and other adults, who believe that at the very first second of our eighteenth birthday we are supposed to magically go through this great transformation into adulthood where we are suddenly able to handle deciding what is an economically advantageous decision to make when choosing what college to attend or what kind of bank account we want. Based on the fact that I do not meet any of the expectations of an adult that our society, sources like Merriam-Webster dictionary, or adults including my parents expect from me as an eighteen year old, I am not an adult.  I may be considered a legal “adult,” but I am in no way ready to act or take on the responsibilities of an adult. Even before I tuned eighteen, my mom would remind me that I was soon going to be an adult so I had to start acting like one, meaning that I had to start doing things on my own. Maybe I am the only one who feels this way, but as soon as my parents recognized me as an individual, what I have desired for the past eighteen years, I felt as if I had been thrown to the wolves. After eighteen years of my parents scheduling everything for me, paying for everything, and pretty much making all my decisions for me, I am now expected to know how to make decisions on my own when I still could not decide, on most days, what shoes I wanted to wear or what to eat for breakfast. On my eighteenth birthday, I was expected to make one of the most important decisions of my life by deciding what college to attend in the fall. It was already overwhelming, and then I began being questioned on what career I wanted to pursue. My response to all of this: “I do not know!” I am still just a kid. I do not know what my future holds and I do not have it all figured out quite yet. Sure, call me an adult, because, yes, I am eighteen years old; however, eighteen is just another number. It does not mean that I am ready to handle being on my own. So, am I really considered an “adult” if I still need the financial help and the personal guidance of my parents? After all of these years of wanting to grow up, I really do not want to grow up anymore.

72 comments:

Anonymous said...

Loved your writing ! Even though im still only 14 i totally understand what you mean by when they say "act your age".

imalla ramirez
period 6

Anonymous said...

This was real cool to read and even though I'm not 18 I understand and get your point you're trying to make so good job.
-Kamau O
P.2

Anonymous said...

I liked this piece and I understand the point you're trying to make even though I'm not 18 but good job.
Kamau O
P.2

Unknown said...

This was really good. I'm only 15 and am scared to turn 18 and have that responsibility of choosing what college to go to and making grown up decisions and becoming more independent. Turning 18 sounds fun but there's so much more that comes with it. This was a good story great job!!

Unknown said...

major respect to this story i have many brothers and sisters that have grown up including my self so i understand everything you said i think what makes a person grown is when people say he grown because like the bible says "when i was a child i thought like a child but when i became a man i thought like a man" so good story!

Anonymous said...

Sophia,
I loved your piece because it was quite relatable. Before the age 18, my parents always treated me as their little baby girl, and I always hated this because I felt that I wanted more freedom and independence. My parents never let me do anything because I was "too young". However, after I turned 18, this switch inside them was flipped and I am now expected to do everything on my own. Just as you mentioned, these major responsibilities and decisions come cashing onto us and I have been left confused and frazzled. I loved the details you used when describing all the situations you were stuck in as it allowed for a clear understanding of your emotions and made it easier to relate. I also liked that you included the dictionary definition of "adult" as it was quite interesting to see what is expected contrasted against what we really experience.
Danielle Delgado
Period 1
4/21/15

Unknown said...

Boba! I liked how your piece was not just a story, but a nice read in that I can relate. We've talked many times about college so we both know our struggles, but I can totally agree with everything you said and how I, and you, do not live up to the "adult" expectations. You don't magically become responsible, and I think it's important you addressed this because some don't understand that, especially parents. Just like age, it takes time. Our future is uncertain and it's hard to make decisions, but I think the way you wrote your piece gives us students a sense of comfort in that we all can relate. Overall, great blog:)

Anonymous said...

Im not and adult yet but when i was reading it i noticed what you were trying to say. I like the way you gave the definition of an adult and i like how you explained how turning 18 is not how parent(s) keepers think it is.

William Bema
per2

Anonymous said...


YES! I loved your piece sophia! Not only is this universal to all 18 year olds, but it holds a deeper meaning to the societal view of 18 year olds being legal adults. I liked how you used the example of the websters dictionary definition of an adult. That was hilarious and true at the same time. I also enjoyed how perspective plays a role in determining how one becomes a legal adult.
-nate s p.1

Anonymous said...

I definitely can relate to your piece. I totally understand your opinion on the different perceptions of what an adult should be. I like how relatable your piece is. In addition I completely agree with the ideas you brought to light regarding the expectations of an eighteen year old, I have been told the same things or at least things similar to those that you brought up by my own parents and I understand where you are coming from. There are so many expectations when you turn eighteen although I think similar to what you said, that we can't automatically acclimate to those expectations right away, we need some time to transform into those things. In conclusion, great work!
Merosa Uiagalelei
Period 5

Anonymous said...

I think all the seniors at Etiwanda can relate to your personal reflection. We all can't wait to graduate, but do we even know what that means. It means no for security, no more routine, no more free school! I enjoyed your piece because it sounded very genuine and personal. You did a great job explaining the "adult expectations" and your use of compression to the title of adult and the age was interesting!
-Evelin Conde
p.2
4/25/15

Anonymous said...

Sophia, I loved your piece because I can relate to this completely. Ever since I turned 16, my parents started to shove this idea down my throat that I need to start acting like an adult and to start acting like a woman, not a child. I'm 18, and I still get this from my parents, and I don't understand why when a person turns 18, at that second, they are expected to take life changing decisions. I also liked how you showed how your parents schedule things for you and pay for you and the moment you turned 18, you are expected to do everything on your own, like choosing what you want to major in and even to the simplest of things like what are you going to wear and what are you going to eat for breakfast? I enjoyed the definition you provided because that is what an adult is supposed to be, and we aren't capable of being called adults since we don't fit that definition. Overall, I really enjoyed how relatable this piece was and how you don't want to grow up like you wanted to when you were younger, because I feel that same way. Good job Boba! :)
Simran Bajwa
Period 1

Unknown said...

Your piece was so relatable. Becoming 18 is something that is one of the most exciting times of your life yet its one of the most stressful because of these sudden expectations you receive. However, your piece was something that can make people realize this and that you shouldn't rush into adulthood. Overall, great job!

Anonymous said...

I can already feel how its going to be when my parents start doing this. Your story got me closer to that feeling, great job.
Melvin Sanchez
Period 6

Unknown said...

Your piece is very relatable. I really liked how you were able to show how becoming 18 can be one of the most exciting yet some of the most confusing transitions of your life. This confusion is a struggle in the transition to adulthood.Also, I liked what you said about not wanting to be an adult anymore. It really shows hoe many people are trying to grow up too fast and once they become adults. Overall, great job!

Jordan Ray said...

This story is really spot on to how all of us seniors are feeling with graduation right around the corner, it is weird seeing the transition from wanting to grow up to wanting to stay kid and how it is all happening so fast. I found your story very well written and very relatable. Way to go.

Fernando Mauri P1 said...

I suppose it would be ironic of me to say that I relate to this because I am not eighteen until the beginning of June, but I do share many of your same concerns, and reading this was definitely a snap back to reality for me because I so easily seek entertainment and other things to distract me from responsibility. I do have faith that you will make the right choices though, I just sincerely hope that whatever you do choose is of your own will and not of anyone else's expectations. It's most important that you're happy.

Unknown said...

Hello I just want to say I love this piece because I can relate to it so much. It seemed once I turned eighteen there was so much more expected of me when I am already trying to do my best.I still feel like a kid who is just following what I think I should do but how am I certain that it is the right choice? Thank you for this, it shows I am not the only one to feel this way.

Unknown said...

For me, coming from a family with two older brothers who have careers and a life of their own, then there's me being the youngest and only girl has shaped me into being independent and taking responsibilities yet I still feel like a child. Your piece is relate able and comforting because despite the fact that I'm basically already on my own, being 18 means nothing and it is nice to know that we all experience this feeling. Your connection to emotion of every 'adult' here is great, good job!

Unknown said...

I totally relate how you feel. I really enjoyed your first person narrative. It made the piece feel more personal, and it was easier to connect to as a reader. Your contrast between expectations and reality really bring the piece together.

Unknown said...

This piece I found was very relatable and interesting because this can't be how only one person feels. There are people in this world born ready to take on the world. This story best describes how it feels like to be one of the people who just don't know. This story explains the fear of alot of young adults and did a really good job listing examples of the things they can barely take care of on their own. It also gives the truth because this is what happens alot of times kids turn 18 and they're magically suppose to be the mature man or woman they've grown to be in reality like it states in the story it's just another number. I really like reading this story and I think alot of others would to great job.

Aiseosa Ibude said...

I love this because I completely understand what you're talking about. I love how you word the expectations of being an "18 year old adult". It shows the stereotypical parent badgering the ever so innocent "young adult". Great Job!

Anonymous said...

Great Job Sophia! I totally get what your saying, because I swear I go through this same discussion of being an adult at eighteen with my parents everyday. I honestly still think I'm a kid, even though I'm "supposed" to act like an adult. I love the way your wrote this post, it's like a mini rant:)

Elisabeth Domond
Period 5

Anonymous said...

Your piece is honestly the most relatable piece I've read all year. I think almost everyone can relate to this, parents expecting more of you yet you have no idea what to do. Everyone says this is the best year of their lives and I'm over here still looking for a job and trying to figure out where to go to college. I can only imagine how hard life is later on down the road but hey at least I'm alive, for now. Anyways, great piece Sophia.

Angel Ramirez
P. 4

Unknown said...

Sophia,
I believe that this is a story that nearly all of us can relate to in some capacity. Even though I am not personally 18, I can understand the overwhelming amount of responsibility that has been suddenly placed on your back. As a fellow senior I am faced with many of the same tough decisions that nearly everyone else in our class is, and I have to make these decisions having experienced and learned so little. People expect that after 12 years of school and 18 years of life that people have it somewhat figured out, but this is rarely true and there is certainly a common expectation that children have that "growing up" automatically means that life improves. I enjoyed your descriptions that underlined exactly how confusing life after 18 can be, relating it to being "thrown to the wolves" and mentioning how you cannot be expected to make important life choices when you can't decide what to eat for breakfast. Overall, a very relatable and well done story!

Anonymous said...

I really liked this, it gave me a different perspective. Growing up is tough and now turning 18 seems like a lot of responsibility.
Kenzie McEwan
period 2

Unknown said...

Amazing job Sophia! I love how you wrote about something that is totally fitting to this time of year. The way you expressed your thoughts and feelings really gave the readers a chance to gain a better understanding of your perspective and really engage into the meaning of your words. I enjoyed reading this because it was 100 percent honest and real. Speaking the truth and allowing the readers to learn more than they could already know about turning 18 or becoming an adult. Overall, well done!

Anonymous said...

I like your perspective on adulthood because for me, my parents haven't been too worried about my age or anything, that is until I told them I was looking at apartments. I think the whole idea of children growing up is very complex but you provided a great understanding to what it means when calling yourself an adult and all of the things that come along with it. I'm sure this topic is on everyone's mind right now and the way you provided personal experiences and your own input really made this a relatable piece.

Katelynn Gutierrez p.4

Unknown said...

I understand and agree with the main point of your argument but I did think some points were off or missing and adjustments could've made this piece have a stronger base. As far as I know, 16 is the age where a person can be tried as an adult if the crime is serious enough. I think using a dictionary definition weakened your argument and it would've had more impact if you used an example of a media outlet because more people are influenced and pressured by media than by Websters dictionary. We could go on and on about books and movies where the characters idealize the grownup world and find that it's not that grand: The Catcher in the Rye, Joy Luck Club, The Great Gatsby, Finding Nemo, etc. They felt the pressures of their society or parents to live a certain way as we do still. I do understand your frustration; being spoon-fed and then suddenly being expected to hunt is ridiculous. There is no transition, no easing in, no sympathy. There's a lot of complain about. For example, I know that the square root of negative one is an imaginary number called i. How do you balance a checkbook? How do you pay taxes? What kind of insurance should I get? I don't know. How about bank accounts? The economy? College? How do those things work? No clue, just as you said and it's aggravating to set worldly expectations for young adults when they're taught obscure numbers in school rather than actual life application. The last line of your post reminded me of a time when I was 8 and my mom told me that all kids wish they could be adults and all adults wish they could go back to being kids. It's a paradox and your story resonates because that's what a lot of us are feeling as well. Overall, good job.

Unknown said...

I understand and agree with the main point of your argument but I did think some points were off or missing and adjustments could've made this piece have a stronger base. As far as I know, 16 is the age where a person can be tried as an adult if the crime is serious enough. I think using a dictionary definition weakened your argument and it would've had more impact if you used an example of a media outlet because more people are influenced and pressured by media than by Websters dictionary. We could go on and on about books and movies where the characters idealize the grownup world and find that it's not that grand: The Catcher in the Rye, Joy Luck Club, The Great Gatsby, Finding Nemo, etc. They felt the pressures of their society or parents to live a certain way as we do still. I do understand your frustration; being spoon-fed and then suddenly being expected to hunt is ridiculous. There is no transition, no easing in, no sympathy. There's a lot of complain about. For example, I know that the square root of negative one is an imaginary number called i. How do you balance a checkbook? How do you pay taxes? What kind of insurance should I get? I don't know. How about bank accounts? The economy? College? How do those things work? No clue, just as you said and it's aggravating to set worldly expectations for young adults when they're taught obscure numbers in school rather than actual life application. The last line of your post reminded me of a time when I was 8 and my mom told me that all kids wish they could be adults and all adults wish they could go back to being kids. It's a paradox and your story resonates because that's what a lot of us are feeling as well. Overall, good job.

Anonymous said...

I don't want to grow up as much as you do, but you should think of it as your ONLY 18. You can do so much! and if you want to be a kid be a kid growing up doesn't mean you can have fun, its all up to you! great work, keep it up!
Bethany Stitt
4/27/15 6:23 pm
period 6.

Sophia Rivas said...

Growing up is so scary and I think your blog is something that everyone is going through right now. It's hard to go from having help and guidance with everything to being expected to do everything on your own overnight.

Anonymous said...

YES. I think the majority of us can all relate to this. Growing up has always been something we wanted, until it actually happens, and in your story you capture this point perfectly. Shoot, I am still 17 and my parents already treat me as an adult, but as soon as I say I am an adult they are like no age will determine if you are an adult or not, it's one's maturity level. Anyways, I love how you decided to talk about the stress of choosing a college and how it's not so simple to do it on your own. Also, great job adding the actual definition of what an adult is and how turning 18 doesn't truly make you one. Overall, wonderful job!
Idalys Martinez
Per.1

Unknown said...

Man! Boba! I agree relate to this on so many levels! Adults are constantly reminded us of what we have to do and what we need to continue to do to make sure that our future turns out successful. The message you presented of parental expectations is such a relevant thing in our lives especially since we are just about to head into the real world where we are expected to make life changing decisions. I like the way you used first person to allow the readers to really connect with the piece you have written good job! (:

Anonymous said...

Sophia, I love this piece, so much. It's so relatable, especially now to all the seniors. Growing up is complicated, we need to adjust to the things we aren't used to. But we have to face it sooner or later. Sure, it will be difficult at first, but isn't everything? I really like how you made it relateable to everyone, not just 18 year olds, because everyone gets to that age at one point, we've all had this feeling. I truly love your piece. Grace Panjaitan p4

Anonymous said...

I enjoyed this piece because while I am only 17, I still feel your pain because of college. After 17 years of life and me only being able to make small, non-impactful, decision I will soon be forced to make almost every decision on my own. This transition will happen in a matter of weeks. I feel as if senior year should have been the year when my Dad stopped making decisions for me, after all my decisions will shortly become the final one. This piece really hit home with me. Great job!
Nehemiah Barnett
Period 4

Anonymous said...

Thank you for speaking what most of us just want to tell the world. I was really able to relate to you since even though graduation is around the corner I am no where near ready to "act like an adult". Great Job

Daniel Alaniz
Period 4

Anonymous said...

You stole my words! Great story and is very relatable.
Anthony Absher
Period 6

Andrew Hernandez said...

I am only 14 so still young but i can relate to not wanting to grow up i have a huge fear of growing up and death and change. Not really change just responsibilities i guess..i dont know anyway you have a very open voice and should continue writing. Ha, maybe even be president.
Andrew Hernandez
Period 2

Unknown said...

We all can relate to this piece. You explained just about how most of us feel and I couldn't have said it any better, good job!

Anonymous said...

Marian Hollinquest
period 4
I can't believe ho relatable your story is! We learn so much fundamental knowledge throughout our lives from kindergarten to our senior, but I go around asking my parents which one of you is gonna teach me how to pay a bill? I'm eighteen and I work at a doctor's office, and I swear I have no idea what HMO or PPO stands for on patient's charts or what that has to do with their insurance! You put all of our feelings into words,
Great Job!

Anonymous said...

Sophia, your piece was seriously really relatable. One day we have to ask permission for everything we do and then all of a sudden we have these huge decisions to make that will be affecting the rest of our lives. Adults tell us that we have to mature and act our age, but then half the time they will still treat us like little kids. I completely agree with you, growing up is hyped up and in the end I wish I didn’t spend so much time wishing I was older.
Sara Arredondo
Period 1

Chris Medina said...

Sophia dang i have to say that your piece was extremly realtable to any high school student espeicallly those that are leaving soon. I liked how you made it so that it was everyones worries and everyones fears when we leave high school. Really good job and i rememeber that i would always wish that I was just older but with out all the responsibilites that come with it.

Anonymous said...

Dang girl nice piece! I liked how your piece was very relatable. I'm scared of being an adult because the decisions we make can have a huge effect on our lives. But I guess that's part of being an adult. Overall, I really an a enjoyed your piece. Keep up the great work!
-Philip Ahn
4th

Anonymous said...

I see your point on growing up. Good story. Everything you said about growing up and taking responsibility is true.
Period 6
Luis Toro.

Gian Velasquez said...

Sophia,
I totally understand where you’re coming from. It is a scary notion that we are going to become adults and that we soon have to become independent from our parents. On that note, I enjoy the way you write because I really connected with how you feel. Your style of writing allows me to feel like we’re communicating face to face. But I say that I am excited to finally become a man. I can’t say I am one, per say, until I have a job and can pay for myself. But I am gradually working my way there. I hope that the meaning of being an adult doesn’t mean that we become boring and dull drones forced to work and do unmeaningful labor whereas we can still enjoy life and bring joy to the world rather than continuing the long train of ugliness we see around us today. I hope that being an adult means that we can make decisions that change lives for the positive.
Gian Velasquez Period 1

Anonymous said...

I am but a young freshman, but my older family members and friends tell me this sort of stuff all the time. They always say that I'm wasting my potential, that I should do better in school and that I need to take my life more seriously because the real world isn't going to hold my hand throughout it. I argue with them by saying that I'm young now and that I don't want to deal with all the technicalities and drama that comes with "growing up." In truth though, I do believe them because it is true, that I will eventually grow up and whether or not I have prepared for the real world, time will go on. Eventually, I will have to deal with these things, but I fear that I will not be ready when the time comes. I do not have time to do everything, but I fear that I will not have time to do anything. As the year comes to an end and I see my poor grades I can only confirm that my decisions now will ultimately doom my future and that I need to do something about it. I have foolishly clung on to my belief that i will never grow up, and in doing so only furthers my self proclaimed prophecy. So that is the reason I will try my hardest to go forward in my life, to try and grow up starting at the earliest I can. Your story is wonderfully executed in a way that every kid reading it could relate to, whether they know it or not.

-Justin Presto
Period 2

Anonymous said...

I really like this because it is true. Before a person turns eighteen your parents always say you're almost eighteen so start growing up but we will always need our parents no matter what. so yeah good job on this story .
~Clarissa Rojas
Period 2

Anonymous said...

This piece was very easy to connect and understand. As high school seniors, we are forced to grow up and become "adults" within a split second, without any warning. The requirement to be an adult gets thrown into our faces and we are forced to deal with it by ourselves. What most people do not understand is that it takes time to fully mature and grow into an adult, it is not something that just happens overnight. We are very unprepared to be adults! We still need a lot of preparation time. Great job Sophia!

Melany M
Per. 1

Unknown said...

I can relate to this story! Like honestly I don't know if going to college is the smartest decision for me because I'll just be in debt paying off student loans for the rest of my life. And while I ask my parents for advice they tell me you are almost 18 you need to figure out what you want to do. And I personally can't my parents have made a lot of my decisions in life and to think that they aren't going to really put there opinion into it makes me realize well damn I'm growing up to where I need to make decisions for myself. We're either 18 or are turning 18 and that is when we become an adult. I don't want to grow up. I'm scared of it and am starting to realize it's not as easy as it looks it's hard to support yourself on your own without having a good job or knowing what you want to do. I loved this short story it was so relatable. Great job! :)

Anonymous said...

i think your piece was very easy to connect to and understand i can totally see your point on how it is being like when your growing up you talked about how there is true responsibility while growing up and a lot of things that need to be taken care of while growing up a lot of good examples and its true We learn so much fundamental knowledge throughout our lives from kindergarten to our senior.

Omid
Period 4

Unknown said...

I believe this can relate to some of us, if not most of us in some way. As we age, we are given new responsibilities and new expectations and some of us just get overwhelmed by it. Some people face it at younger ages or older ages, but it really only matters on the individual of when they mature. I'm 15 myself and personally I'm already stressed by the things I encounter at this age. Well, we all got to take life head on eventually.

Anonymous said...

I like what you wrote because it relates to all of us becoming older and soon an adult but it makes me think what I am going to do for my career. I liked this out of all the other writings on the blogs. Good job!
-Angel Gonzalez
p2

Anonymous said...

I love this narrative because it is extremely relatable and relevant to everything that is going to happen in the upcoming months. I have caught myself saying many of the things that you wrote about. As for parents and their expectations of you when you reach eighteen, I completely understand, my dad on the daily says things about topic. I really enjoyed this piece and keep preaching.
-Jacob Valdez
Period 4

Anonymous said...

Well I haven't turned eighteen yet, but this piece really makes me look forward to it. Despite the sarcasm, I can still definitely relate to this piece even if I am not yet eighteen years old, because I have still had to make some of those decisions, and I can agree with you in saying that I don't want to grow up anymore. Anyway, the first person point of view made the piece even better because it was like we were both there, freaking out about the responsibilties that await us. Overall, good job!

Anthony Hurd
Period 4

Unknown said...

I think most of us seniors can relate to the message you've presented which focuses on parental expectations and expectations of other adults in general. This topic is so relevant at this point in our lives seeing as though we are heading into the real world ourselves soon after graduation where we are expected to make life changing decisions on our own. I appreciate your utilization of first person point of view, it really gives insight of internal confliction to the readers and also allows them to truly relate to the piece. Very well written.
Period 4

Unknown said...

Madi Cordura P.1

This piece makes me so happy. I am so honored to know you Sophia this is amazing! I love how you defy this stereotype that people place upon kids our age. In general, there are basically two extreme categories that we are placed in. One is where adults expect us to be adults right as the clock strikes midnight on our 18th birthdays, and the other is where adults don't allow us to even think of ourselves as anything near adults just because we're 18.
I love how you accept that just because you have been on this earth for eighteen years, it doesn't mean you magically evolve over night simply because the number that people classify you by changes. It really makes me happy that there are people like you in this world that understand we are still kids, and we still do need guidance. This is amazing. I love it.

Unknown said...

Sophia, I really loved your piece and thought it was beautifully written. This topic of growing up and taking on newer and bigger responsibilities is relatable to many seniors especially at this time of year. Although I know you to be this mature and intelligent person it is comforting to hear that we share in the same struggles and that I am not alone in my fears.

Unknown said...

By far one of my favorite pieces. Aside from it being one of the most relatable situations, it was well written with a humorous element to it. I love how confronting you are about this issue and your firm stance at knowing you are not ready to be an adult…Heck a lot of us aren't ready. The line "I felt as if I had been thrown to the wolves" grabs my attention the most because it is basically how I feel right now. Being thrown into this thing called life not really knowing how to fend for myself. The transition from child to adult is hard as well as living up to the expectation parents expect from us at this age. The end of your piece when you say, "18 is just another number and you are not ready to make adult decisions" is in a way my favorite part. From this part I gathered that although I am "18" and legally seen as adult I do not have everything figured out and although I will have everything figured out one day, 18 does not half to be the number I figure out what I want to do with my life.

Unknown said...

Being 18 and experiencing this same thing I can relate I liked how connected it to reality and it wasn't like a story more of a free for all .

Erick A. Vazquez said...

This is a very outstanding piece of writing in the fact that not only are you able to define accurately your current situation in this world, but you are able to show others, as myself what it truly means to be 18. Your writing showed me, even though becoming 18 comes with props such as , "buy lottery tickets, legally drive friends, vote, attend jury duty", it doesn't mean we are actually an adult. I liked how persuasive your writing came out to be with the plentiful amount of facts that, such as making decisions in your life, because I was able to relate to the situation your in and it caused me to look at my life in a new light. Great job.

Unknown said...

The story was great, the conflict and the way you showed how life changes at any moment. Good job !

Mahlon Howard said...

This story was relatable and can be relatable to everyone. We'll all be 18 one day it not now, but for seniors, graduation is in 3 weeks and our lives are finally starting who choose can be really scary. But the irony of having to be reminded of your responsibilities as an adult, your parents will still treat you like a child at times. I'm only 17 and I'll turn 18 in a few months. Great job and life is almost real for us.

Mahlon Howard
Period 4

Unknown said...

Sophia! I really enjoyed your piece! I appreciate how you wrote on a subject that most, if not all, seniors are currently going through. Thank you for writing this.

Anonymous said...

Such a great story and very relatable, we all look forward to becoming 18, and we should also dread it at the same time. I enjoyed how you said the perks of Turing 18, and then also revealed the not so good side. great Job
Kaleha Spencer
Period:4

Unknown said...

How true this piece is! It resonates with the reality of our situation and I found myself becoming more and more anxious while reading it. Making it personal added to the effect, in my opinion, and made the entire piece much more relatable.

Anonymous said...

I love how relatable your piece was. Every senior ca relate because we are all going through a very stressful time period. It gave me a different outlook on my current situation. Overall great piece keep up the great work!
-Leah Hernandez
period 4

Anonymous said...

I love how relatable your piece was. Every senior ca relate because we are all going through a very stressful time period. It gave me a different outlook on my current situation. Overall great piece keep up the great work!
-Leah Hernandez
period 4

Anonymous said...

I love how relatable your piece was. Every senior ca relate because we are all going through a very stressful time period. It gave me a different outlook on my current situation. Overall great piece keep up the great work!
-Leah Hernandez
period 4

Unknown said...

I fully and completely know where you're coming from! This time in a person's life is so stressful and difficult, no one ever said that once you turn eighteen you're on your own. I totally get what you're saying. I haven't even turned eighteen yet and my parents are saying the same things you described in your writing. I liked your piece because it was easily relate able to other students because we've all gone through that.

Anonymous said...

I really enjoyed reading your piece. It was very relatable and I know exactly how you feel. I really liked how you described the feeling of becoming an adult.
Alyssa Anastasi
P.5

Anonymous said...

I am no where near an adult but I have a friend who is soon going to be an adult. He told me, "I'm going to have to have so many responsibilities and I can't handle them." Even though I'm not close to 18, my parents still say act like an adult but I really can't. Great read, loved it a lot!
Anthony Chao
Period 6