In the countryside,
where the smallest of towns are hidden, and where nature is embedded into the
cloth, that are those tiny towns. There lay a lonely home, no neighbors found
but an enchanting forest. In that home a child rests by his open window, gazing
up at the night sky waiting for the sounds of the forest to tell him a story of
true magnificence, that would allow his little head to lay and fall into a deep
sleep. As was every night before, the forest outside the child’s window would
speak telling him stories as he would sleep, however on this night the forest
was silent. The child restless and unable to slumber, decided that if he could
reach closer to the forest that maybe the story he seeked would be told and he
could return to bed to sleep once again. So his journey began, as he left his
house to go request the forest for a story he desired for his slumber. The
stars were even brighter as he began his trek, night had fell onto the child,
but the sky was the deepest blue and gave the child comfort as his undersized
legs carried him along on his adventure. Eventually, he reached the outside of
the forest where the densest of trees stand, almost as a barrier to all the
mystic phenomena that occur behind those trunks. As he arrived looking up to
the trees, the silence that fills the cool mountain air is deafening. Soon
almost like a cat sneaking up on a mouse, a breeze picks up and the child looks
up in utter disbelief, As he felt the wind picking up around him and the trees
start swaying back and forth as if they were dancing, it was an invitation for
the young child into the joyous occasion. So he did, the leaves off the ground
began to circulate around the boy and lead him into the forest. It was apparent
then, that the trees began to sing to the child, a song of softness and comfort
as he enters the forest to delve deeper for his search of his story that he
would enjoy at the side of his bed. The child has finally entered into the
forest, the trees begin to quiet down, and the sounds of a creek begin to occupy
the little child’s ears. As he breathes out, his breathe is caught in the cool
winter air, as if it had belonged to the night sky. The trees began to speak
again, though not of a story, but of directions to follow the sounds of the
creek. So the journey continued, the child began to to follow the ever growing
sounds of the stream of water. The sounds grew and grew, almost as if the child
became apart of the stream itself. Following along the stream, the child sees
fireflies hastily flying after one another as if they were after something too.
Soon the whole forest around him was lit up by these small insects. The boy
thought to himself, and felt as if the night sky itself fell upon him on this
walk to wherever the creek would lead him. The fireflies finally dispersed,
falling into the night sky, but not before the young child had reached the end
of the creek. In his astonishment he had found that it lead to a waterfall, and
the moon sat comfortably above the seemingly abundant source of water, while the
water lit up by each star in the sky glistened and flowed it’s way to the
child’s hands. Rocks that seemed to be carved out by those of the renaissance
age, seemed to hold this waterfall together. The child began to run up and down
following the water as they were playing a game of tag, one trying to outrun
the other. The child ran as if the night had no end and the sky would stay a
deep blue forever. Finally after some time had past, the child heard something
rattle near a bush. Startled the child immediately began to retract back into
the forest. As he stepped slowly it had a appeared, a lowly deer searching for
its food. A smile wider than a mile appeared onto the child’s face, as the deer
noticed the child the two made eye contact for what had seemed forever.
Eventually the deer drew back, into the forest. At that time, the child finally
realized it was time for him to head back. Following the creek back, the trees
began to hum a song to the child. As the song grew in loudness, so did the
child’s urgency for sleep. He eventually reaches the edge of the forest back to
his home, where his journey started. The trees began to take their place back,
slowly beginning to stop swinging and humming. The trees stopped, but the child
gazed one last time in utter amazement. The short walk finally ends, as he
reaches his window and climbs back into his room where his bed lay. As the
child begins to lay his head, he decides to look out at the forest one more
time. There he sees the deer from earlier, with a small pause he give the dear
a slight nod and a smile. From there, the deer begins to turn back as he slowly
trots back to the forest as the trees begin swinging again in a jolly manner.
The young child then lays his head to rest for the night safely in his bed, he
realizes the forest did indeed grant him a story. A story only found in the
countryside, where the smallest of towns are hidden, and where nature is
embedded into the cloth of this tiny town. Satisfied, he shuts his little eyes
as the he slowly falls into sleep, goodnight.
13 comments:
Awww I loved this story! Everything about it was amazing but what I enjoyed the most was how the imagery and movement made the story come alive. I felt as if I was there alongside the child going through the forest and listening to the trees sing. Great job!
This story was refreshing to read. You included so much detail and I could imagine everything. I was captivated by your effortless storytelling. It was beautiful thank you for sharing!
I absolutely loved reading this piece. I love all the imagery that is embedded in your piece. Good job julls (:
I liked that you used various senses to stimulate the reader. The whole piece felt very fantastical. The line between dream and reality is blurred out. Great work!
Okay projulls I see you. You did really good describing everything within this story and it grabbed my attention very easily. You did a good job on creating an image in my head. Good job!
Very relaxing narrative. It’s very refreshing to read about the sounds and visuals of nature. It’s very contrasting to the society today. The imagery and descriptions of the scenes were very appealing and enthralling. Great job!
Jeremiah Credo P1
Great job on this Jullian, you were very detailed and descriptive! This entry gave me a lot of mystical forest vibes with elves and fairies haha
I'm in love with this narrative, it's such a delightful fresh piece to read. I had high engagement throughout the whole piece, because of your use of imagery on the boy's venture out to obtain his want for a story. I also imagined myself following the boy from his little home out to the forest. Again such a detailed and adorable story, amazing!
Wow your story was very descriptive and really sounded like a child's fairy tale adventure. The story was also very to read and easily put me in a good mood.
I haven't read a narrative story as detailed as this in a while and not just on this blog site. It looks very professional and written very well with a marvelous story that kept me intrigued with the child's journey. The imagery really gave a vivid experience and a sense of mystery and wonder as I read through. This is without a doubt one of the best stories I've read recently and I just have to say you did a wonderful job at creating it. I hope I get to see more from you someday with another masterpiece like this one.
- Justin Presto (Per. 1)
This was such a peaceful narrative. Somehow, the boy's journey felt both enchanting and realistic. It's cool that you were able to express these kinds of childhood dreams and fantasies.
Great job Julian!! I loved all of the imagery scattered throughout the story. The way you wrote your story brought a sense of both innocent yet risk taking elements. I think it's really cool that you did that and it shows what your writing abilities are capable of. I also wonder who the little boy is and how that character came to be and developed in your mind. I'll ask you sometime. And again, great job!!
I really enjoyed this quick and light story, Julian. You added many details that really made the story alive.
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