Describing how my life was changed
three years ago I would say it was all because of him. There aren’t any exact
words to describe how I feel about him or how much he means to me or even our
story together. But as he stood behind that tree on that sunny spring day three
years ago, anticipating my answer as I read the words on that white piece of
paper, it was like all the emotions flooded into my heart effortlessly. And
then one day he just held my hand and I didn’t ever want to let go. As time
went on our smiles got brighter and our hearts mended deeper. Everyday I found
something new to cherish about him. Our bond was inseparable, our spirits were
higher than the clouds, and our hearts were pulled together as one. Then one
day, the words “I love you” quietly filled my ears as he looked me in the eyes
on that gloomy autumn day. My cheeks filled with a blushing pink and it dawned
on me this boy I said yes to six months ago treasured me in a way nobody has
ever done before, making me feel like I could accept myself, considering he had
already done so. We went on day by day enjoying each others presence, learning
and growing with one another. We stood together through heartaches, pain, and
our lowest of lows. Months went by and our love for each other only got deeper.
Each year we entered, we promised new adventures, endless amount of love and
support, and to be there for one another through the worst of times and best of
times. He taught me throughout the years how to stand with someone, how to
trust and love, and what it is like to be accepted by someone else. He taught
me the meaning of dedication and sacrifice and how to put another being before
myself. He taught me to love and appreciate the person I am and to always
remember I am important. He has taught me thousands of valuable lessons over
our years together and I could not be more thankful. One of my most cherished lessons
I have learned from him, is if you find that one certain person in your life, falling
in love with them will be extraordinary and beautiful, the feeling is
indescribable. I do not know when it happened. It just happened, and I'm
grateful it did. You cannot predict when something like this will happen. It is
too precious to know when it is coming. It was easy. Unpredictable. Natural.
But it was perfect. It was perfect because despite my flaws and imperfections
he stood with me, and fell for me, as I did for him. I don't know when it
happened, but I know how. It was somewhere between him tracing the tiny bumps
on my arms with his fingertips, that I have come to love or me feeling the scar
above his right eyebrow, or him counting the freckles on my face with his lips.
It was somewhere between introducing him to my family and him telling me the
dreams he has at night. It was between the first kiss we shared and his
laughter when he noticed how clumsy I am. Between our first argument, our
walks, our park dates, our long talks, our happiness together, it just
happened. It was the simple things that made something so beautiful.
48 comments:
I really enjoyed reading your piece! I love the amount of thought and detail you put into this piece. The story you told is a romance that many wish they had themselves. Your story makes love such a heartfelt and warming thought! Overall, I absolutely loved your piece! Well done!
- Deborah Fraire
Period 1
Leggy!! I love this blog entry so much. You not only shared something so personal, but something that many wish to have in their lives. Anyone who reads this can come closer to understanding what it's like to fall unconditionally in love with someone, if they haven't done so already. This entry is very genuine. Great job!
-Natalia Garcia (or as you call me- "Nacho")
Period 2
Legend!I love your piece so much, I can tell it has a lot of personal meaning which I commend you for sharing on the blog. Im sure there are many people who can read this and relate. I really hope you continue to write because this was very good.
-Jazlynn Garcia
Period 2
This was so beautifully written! I truly enjoyed the emotion that simply seeped through every word. The specific details made me feel as if I was watching a movie and made the reading experiance very emotional and personal. Thank you for writing such an amazing piece!
This was such a beautiful piece. The amount of emotion that you put into this, is so great. You can really tell that you put a lot of thought into it. i loved every word of it. great job!
-calaya A.
period1
Wow, this piece was honestly so amazing and beautiful and every single way. I loved the use of imagery and detail that you used to make this piece come to life. Great job, I would love to read more of your work in the future!!
Daveena San
Per. 2
This was well written and very personal. It had a lot of details
Legend!! Your piece is so wonderfully written. It has so much emotion and depth to it that i shed a tear when i read it. I loved how you shared such personal experiences with us. Your story satisfied the hopeless romantic in me!!
Legend you're such a beautiful girl and I loved reading your piece. Your use of imagery describing the simple "little things" in love and a relationship such as, "kissing scars and freckles", is what made me cry. I admired how bold you were in choosing to display your feelings. Your piece is genuine, heartfelt, and thought provoking. It's true that the best artwork comes from the heart. Amazing job!
Great descriptions! This is a beautifully written piece, the way your seem to cherish every word you write. I can tell this was written out of personal experience due to the passionate and uplifting tone. The way you intricately write your experienced intimacy with another human is so wonderfully done. Aside from the romance your writing skills are great, and the structure you presented gave the reader a sense of belonging in the story itself. Almost as if we were experiencing it as well. Keep it up girl!
Jordyn France
Per 3
Cogswell
Great descriptions! This is a beautifully written piece, the way your seem to cherish every word you write. I can tell this was written out of personal experience due to the passionate and uplifting tone. The way you intricately write your experienced intimacy with another human is so wonderfully done. Aside from the romance your writing skills are great, and the structure you presented gave the reader a sense of belonging in the story itself. Almost as if we were experiencing it as well. Keep it up girl!
Jordyn France
Per 3
Cogswell
This is such a wonderfully written piece and I love that you chose to do something so personal. The reader can easily see how much this genuinely means to you! The way that you conveyed your emotions through the imagery was so wonderfully done and romantic. Also, reading this made me so happy because of how adorable and beautiful it is. Good job, Legend!
Fiona Cheung
Period 3
I loved this piece! I liked how detailed it was and how much imagery was put into this. This piece made me feel happy and in awe. The romance in this was written well. Good job!
-Valarie Ly
Period 1
Its so nice to see people in love and mean it. What you two have appears to be very special as of reading this piece. Your description of your relationship was key to this piece.
Legggg, I absolutely adored this piece. I loved the words you used and how vividly you described how you felt about him. I could almost feel how you felt about him just from how you described everything in depth. Great job, keep on writing.
-Kelene H. P2
I can tell when a piece has so much emotion and thought into it that it remains really honest and raw (and this piece was that.) You were so personal with this and it was like you were just thinking out loud because writing about him came so easy to you. Wonderful job Legend :)
I absolutely loved this piece because it was so genuine and honest. The imagery and description was enough to get a sense of the emotion you feel with your significant other. I love that you aren't afraid to show and express your true feelings and get a little personal. Great job Legend!
-Victoria Hurtado
period 5
Very well written piece. The details that were put into this piece were done perfectly. Also, this piece was very descriptive. I especially appreciated this piece. Very well done. Keep writing!
Leggy! I know your piece is very meaningful and I justsave to share that I very much enjoyed it. Even though that one person had such a humongous impact, you still are such an Incredible person. Great job girl!!
Legend girl this peace was so meaningful and romantic towards the end it made me realize who you were talking to;)But ya good job and great amount of detail, yet I am glad that individual had a gigantic impact on you.
I loved this piece so much! Its so beautifully written that it makes me want a relationship like that. Great job!
This is a great submission! It has many different stylistic devices that help the reader relate a little bit. Its also very insightful and heartwarming. Awesome submission.
-Per 4
Aww Legend! Im a sucker for love and this piece is so beautiful! I love how you described all of the things that make it all perfect and parts of happiness. I could read pieces like yours all day! So raw and lovely and filled with so much emotion, my heart was melting! Great Job Legend!
P2
Legend, I absolutely loved reading this piece! You make it extremely personable and describe your whole world and that is something that is very special to share with others. You really make me want to have exactly what you do and to be able to cherish someone like that. Your short story is absolutely adorable and filled with descriptive imagery and well done sentence structuring. This was an adorable piece. I loved reading it! Thanks for sharing it!
Legend, I absolutely loved reading this piece! You make it extremely personable and describe your whole world and that is something that is very special to share with others. You really make me want to have exactly what you do and to be able to cherish someone like that. Your short story is absolutely adorable and filled with descriptive imagery and well done sentence structuring. This was an adorable piece. I loved reading it! Thanks for sharing it!
I love the detail you put into your piece. The way you described everything makes it feel genuine and heartwarming. I honestly loved the lessons that you relay to us in your work. Also the love you described truly sounds one of a kind. Keep up the great work!
Joseph Jacinto
Period 5
This was an amazing story to read, it brought me to place that I haven't been in a while. I loved how much detail you put into it and how easy it was to picture everything you were talking about. I also really loved how simple it was to get a major topic across to the reader, it seemed like it was effortless.
This was such a beautifully written piece! You can easily tell the amount of meaning behind the words and imagine all those feelings you that have written in such a perfect way that make this love story so beautiful!
Leslie Rocha
Per.2
This was a beautiful piece Legend , I enjoyed how you described the little things of how you slowly fell in love with him . I hope you guys get married !!!!! Haha , I hope that one day my relationship will bloom into what you have with "H". Amazing Job !!!
I loved this piece! The amount of detail and imagery you used made the story 10 times better. I love the hopeless romantic feel it has to it and how warm I felt reading it. Great job!
Emily French
Period 5
Legend this piece was very beautiful. You made it very personal and gave so much detail about the way the relationship is and how each of you feel about each other. So romantic!
Jessica Perez
Period 3
Legend! This was such a beautifully written piece. I loved the amount of raw emotion and romance put into it. The imagery you used made the reader able to see what was going on in their mind throughout the story. I really enjoyed reading it. Great job!
I really like this piece because of the noticeable effort you put in to really make it an enjoyable piece. Love stories like this are always interesting. Good job
-Michael Dingle
Period 5
Oh my gosh this one of the best stories i have ever read. Im not sure if it is real or fiction but either way it is amazing and beautiful. Wonderful job!!!
Madison Behee
Per.4
My boy Hunter is such a sweetheart! Lol I'm happy for y'all, you guys have always been the cutest couple at Etiwanda!!! Anyways, aside from that I loved your piece. So much imagery, and so much over was integrated into it, and it fits well with the upcoming season too!! Valentines day! Your piece amade me wish to have that special someone in my life to kick it with, but I guess my time will come lol. Anyways, good job Legend it was great.
Rodrick Hill
Period 1
I believe that this story is grade A writing, you did so well on portraying how simple things can be so beautiful no matter the size. As long as there is a heart to its meaning, then it will make you so unbelievably happy. Overall a marvelous expression of passion and a superb job of translating emotions into words.
-Period 4
Leggie, I can not begin to describe how beautiful and meaningful this piece is. It is SO easy to share ones' most precious memories and moments, but we never keep in mind the road that we take to get there. I know that your piece has so much meaning to it and as a hopeless lover who can compare to you -the speaker- in this personal reflection, I so very much admire this piece. Putting your heart out there is never easy but falling in love has to be the most beautiful thing one can experience. I LOVE your use of diction and syntax throughout and the way you make the reader balance their senses makes it so much more intriguing. Good job beautiful!
This is amazing, I love how this entire piece seems effortless. I also really love how meaningful your piece is. The imagery you used really made it easier to get into your piece. This piece was really inspiring. Amazing job!!!
Kayla Weathers
PD.5
Wow! This piece is really thought full and filled with interesting things. So much imagery and lots of thinking to this! You can definitely tell you put alot of thinking and effort into this. Bravo!
Ricky Martin
Per.4
Great job on this piece! You really poured your heart out. I don't know you very well but after reading this piece I feel like a know a very personal part of you. I absolutely love everything you said in this piece and i really relate to it. Falling in love is honestly the best feeling ever and it makes me happy that you were able to experience something so beautiful :-)
-Annika Joshi p. 5
Great job on this piece! You really poured your heart out. I don't know you very well but after reading this piece I feel like a know a very personal part of you. I absolutely love everything you said in this piece and i really relate to it. Falling in love is honestly the best feeling ever and it makes me happy that you were able to experience something so beautiful :-)
-Annika Joshi p. 5
This piece is amazing! Legend you did such a great job! I love how you captured all your emotions and focused them down to a clear and understandable piece of writing. This is extremely vivid and I always considered a good writer to be someone who pushes the reader to feel an emotion and Legend you did just that!
-Alexis Carmona
Period 5
I enjoyed reading your piece so much! Your detailing was great that all I did was picture every scenario in my head.
- Diana Godinez
This piece is amazing. It got me hooked on as i was reading it. It was filled with excitement and joy over the details and the input of the piece. It was very beautiful.
-Michelle Truong
Period 1
i really enjoyed this piece the heart and soul you gave into this story really made it feel much more realistic.. Great work!!
This piece was beautifully written! I loved all the detail you included and could tell this was something that was close to your heart. Your emotions were clearly portrayed and I could feel the excitement and happiness through each of your delicately chosen words. I applaud you for writing with such passion.
Dianna Caal-Requena
Period 3
I greatly enjoyed reading this! This piece is truly heart felt and very well written! The way you described your relationship with him is so beautiful and touching.
Abby Elvis
Period 3
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