When the Chinese Communist Party suppressed the pro-democracy Tiananmen Square protests,
my mother was forced to quit school and flee Beijing when she was only 21. She sought true
freedom: somewhere she could build herself and her family without restrictions, such as China’s
one child policy. In pursuit of her “American Dream”, she came to California, where she would
later raise five children.
After ten years of working odd jobs and receiving aid from friends and family, my mother settled
and started her own trucking business in our living room, with my step-father as the only driver.
During summers, I would accompany my parents on business trips across the country, seeing
America through rural truck stops and scenic highways. At home, my mother had to create a
makeshift room in the garage for our family and rented out all of the bedrooms, so I helped her
find and manage new tenants. It was rare that I would have a room to myself. My family’s
unconventional, entrepreneurial endeavor allowed us to get by and we were grateful.
But my biological father passed away when I was eleven, just as my two older siblings began
college, disrupting the precarious financial security we had been working hard to maintain.
Incapable of surviving the high socioeconomic standards of Arcadia, my family moved to
Rancho Cucamonga. A year after moving, my mother got licensed herself and started driving
with my step-father to increase income. It became a rare occurrence for my parents to have the
leisure of staying home. I believed that leaving the community I had built myself into halfway
through high school would be horrifying, so I convinced my family to let me stay with a friend in
Arcadia for another semester. I would occasionally visit my family every weekend and lived
with my best friend during summer school and then the beginning of sophomore year.
Once I finally moved, I reminded myself that this inevitable change was similar to my mother’s
move to America. Rather than be deterred by the challenge of starting over, I pushed myself to
make the best of my time in High School. I was exposed to a world that deviated from the Asian
culture I was raised around, and I developed a standard to build my character for the purpose of
self-improvement, not to satiate society’s normatives.
I am now on the brink of another transition, with college merely months away. We’re all in this
weird position wondering where we might end up next year, since most of us are still dreading
the college acceptance letters. But after these next couple months, it’ll all be okay. We’ll know
where we’ll want to be next year and we’ll have to make the best of the opportunity. I was
reluctant to move away from home to adapt to an entirely new environment, but it was an
experience that prompted my eagerness to explore. It revealed the true nature of the multifaceted
culture my parents came for, and how diverse a city just thirty minutes away from home can be.
College will be an experience to absorb the culture that people from across the world will bring
to us. Honestly, just have fun and enjoy life while we’re young and work hard! Let’s get through
the rest of this year!
I loved the brief history you gave on your mother in the beginning, my favorite piece by far! I honestly think you're a great writer. Everything was able to be read smoothly and shared a motivating message. I'd agree, change is good. It's great to have new experiences and learn something from the things that we go through. Outstanding!
ReplyDeleteUsing a personal anecdote at the beginning to prove your point of optimism for the coming months was such a great choice! It was great getting to know a bit more of your background and made the reader relate to your struggles with being nervous about the future. It definitely gives me hope for the coming months.
ReplyDeleteI am very much a person who needs routine and hates change. Reading your piece showed me that change is meant to happen and no matter the circumstances you can make the best out of any situation. Your piece flowed so well and I genuinely enjoyed reading it. Great work!
ReplyDeleteThis stood out to me because I have gotten the opportunity to know you, but nothing as personal as the work you have submitted here. Change is terrifying, it's this immaterial fear that you can't get rid of because, like you said, it's inevitable. You, however, portrayed a positive outlook upon the idea of change, and that alone deserves commendation!
ReplyDeleteThanks for sharing this personal piece, as my family as went through a similar situation as your's. My family fled Vietnam and into the U.S. to pursue what you called the "American Dream." You put heavy emotions into this piece and with the title, it's good to change, because things change. Great piece, Wong!
ReplyDeleteI found many similarities from you story to my own life, as I am an immigrant coming to America hopeful for a better opportunities than my original home. Much like many of the pieces I have read, you display the same sense of ambiguity that, I'm pretty sure, all seniors feel at this point, and it was very motivating at the end of your piece where you give us a confidence boost. Your writing style is remarkable and starting off with the story about your mom really put things into perspective and set the mood for your story that relates to the events that happened later in your life. Thank you for sharing your story with us, Jonathan!
ReplyDeleteAmazing story, Jonathan! Change is a fundamental part of anyones life, and to neglect it is a mistake. The part that hit me the most is the college part, especially being from a family that doesn't like college bound students moving out. Amazing!
ReplyDeleteI thought it was amazing that not only did you show the fear and negativity you initially expressed with change, but the transition to hope and optimism you had was just surprising. The optimism for the future you express in this piece is amazing and I hope to share the joy you have for the future. Great job on this piece.
ReplyDeleteThis is such a raw and touching piece! You really shed light on what it is like to come from an immigrant background, and the trials and tribulations they have to go through to go and live out that "American Dream". I enjoyed how you were able to utilize your past as a means to foreshadow the optimistic future that beholds.
ReplyDeleteYour story is very well composed and executed and I personally loved you're own account of life constantly transitioning and adapting to new situations and responsibilities. Wonderful job!
ReplyDeleteI used to be afraid of change too, but I realized that it helps open doors in life. Coming from an immigrant background I can relate to some of the things you said here, I think it's great how you decided to make the best out of the situation and I hope you're able to do so in your endeavors after high school. Great job!
ReplyDeleteI liked your story because it showed that even though change may be uncomfortable we all still have to go through it, especially when we graduate from high school and go into college.
ReplyDeleteI liked how you included a brief history of your mother's challenges and experiences while trying to achieve the "American Dream" which is sought after by many. My family also had a similar experience immigrating to America and having to start a new life. I also liked how your story then transitioned into telling about your own personal journey. Very well written!
ReplyDeleteThis piece of about accepting change is amazing, and it was great how you incorporated your own experiences to assure readers that change occurs all the time, and we shouldn't be afraid of it. I can also relate to your family coming to the U.S. in search of a better life, as my grandmother and mother came here as immigrants as well. The optimistic ending about change was very motivating, great job!
ReplyDeleteYour piece conveys the benefits of accepting change. Change is a dreadful idea to some as it leads us down a cloudy and unpredictable path; It takes us away from our comfort zone. However, change introduces us to new experiences in life and allows us to shape our mindset from its foundations. - Jerico Dizon
ReplyDeleteThis story has a really important message, its inspiring how you brought so many different examples of change that affected your life and were able to make them flow together and create such a positive, well written piece. great job - Nathan Smith
ReplyDeleteThe way you combined the personal life of your mother with what you were experiencing really caught my attention. We are all frightened by what the future holds for us, but the last paragraph of your writing reminds us that we are all just doing this for our own benefit and to better ourselves as well as the people around us.
ReplyDeleteThis was a great piece. I liked that it started off as a story of you and your family and then became something inspirational for all of us. It really helped motivate readers who are afraid of change. Good Job.
ReplyDeleteI enjoyed your piece of writing, because you are sharing a part of your life with us. It helps get to know you better and allows us to compare our life experiences with your own. Your last paragraph was very insightful, and you did great by connecting your story with the ending of your piece of writing. Nice!
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This was a really nice narrative about how you had to adapt to a new high school and how you took your mother's example to get through it. I like how you opened with the Tainanmen Square protest since it promoted for change and this would be the first time knowing of someone that was affected by that event. You are right that change is inevitable in life and we must learn to go with it and not resist.
ReplyDeleteWoah you started this with the hardships of your hardworking mother and the struggles your family faced, and ended it with, "it'll all be cool, we'll all be fine." It's pretty cool how seemingly casual you were with sharing this story with the rest of us students, despite how difficult it seems your life and your mother's was. It's nice to hear that even people that appear to have more difficulties and a heavier past than others can stay positive and look forward to the future.
ReplyDeleteI really enjoyed this piece because of the parallels you drew between your mother having to make a transition to a new way of life and you moving into a new area, it really conveys the transcendence of experiences over time. I appreciate the level of personal narrative that you decided to include in your work. Good job!
ReplyDeleteThis was a really interesting story Jon. Your description of the story of your Mother's journey to America and how it changed everything in your life, from having to be on long road trips to helping with finding tenants for your house. Furthermore, your story conveys the realities of having to move from one school to the next and I loved how you were able to compare that transition to that of your Mother's journey to California. I hope you find success in your transition to college and into a new life.
ReplyDeleteI genuinely enjoyed this piece due to the positivity throughout. You made the best of your situation and stayed optimistic, which I find is very hard for many to do. I was able to feel your sincerity and it is clearly very relevant to us all one way or another. I admire your mother and you also made me note that my mother has been there for me in that same way, making sacrifices I don't always keep in mind. I wish you the best and I thank you for sending out such a kind message and personal story. :)
ReplyDeleteIm glad you decided to share your actually life story with the blog rather than a written fictional. I really liked the message you got out of your experience and i know for many of us seniors its very scary to go off to college and start anew. But its not impossible and we will all be able to do it. Overall Good JOb!!
ReplyDeleteGreat piece! I love how you related your mother's own personal struggle with a struggle of your own. Change can be hard to accept, and I'm glad that you convinced yourself that change is also good! The message you conveyed in your piece is perfect for our class, especially since we'll be transitioning into a new experience of our lives like you said. Thank you for sharing such a wonderful piece! Wow Jonathan, great moves! Keep it up. Proud of you.
ReplyDeleteThank you for sharing about your family's history, it really helped me understand your background. I also had to leave my friends and beloved school in Pasadena when I moved to the IE, so I completely understand how difficult the transition can be. However, I commend you for blending in so well and making great friends. I enjoyed your piece of advice at the end. Great job!
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