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Monday, December 7, 2015
"The Girl" by Michelle T
One foggy night, a girl name Sally was jogging around the neighborhood. As she was jogging, she got a phone call from her mom. Sally stopped jogging and answer her phone. As she put the phone up to her ear, she heard a scream. Suddenly, the call ended. Sally ran home as fast as she could. Finally, Sally arrived at her house, Sally went inside and open the door. As she opened the door and went inside the house, she see a man dragging her mom and dad to the floor. Sally is in shock, she couldn’t move at all. Suddenly, Sally let out a scream. Then, the man turned around and see Sally standing there. He put her parents down on the floor, and slowly walked up to Sally. Sally wanted to run, but she can’t. Since, she is in shock after what she just saw. The man looked at Sally closely, then suddenly put his hand on her mouth. Sally opened her mouth and bit him. The man let out a scream. Suddenly, Sally ran out to the door. She’s running on the street yelling for help, but no one hear her. Following from behind her, the man chase her. As Sally was running, a car came and suddenly ran over her. The man stopped running and stand out on the street. The driver went out of his car and called for an ambulance. On the other side of the street, the man looked closely at the girl. The ambulance had arrived and took Sally to the hospital. The man looked at the name of the ambulance to see what hospital are they taking her. As the ambulance took off, the man ran over to the driver and knocked him out. He opened the car door and went inside. Then he sat down in the car seat, and start to drive. He followed the ambulance in front of him. Finally, the ambulance and the man arrived at the hospital. While Sally is being taken in the hospital, the man waited inside his car. Sally was being taken in the emergency room and the doctors performed surgery on her. As time passes, the doctors is finally done. The surgery was a success. The nurses took Sally into a room. Suddenly, Sally opened her eyes. She didn’t know where she is, so she asked one of the nurses. The nurses told her she is at the hospital. Suddenly, Sally had to go to the restroom. Meanwhile, as the man waited inside the car. He finally got out of the car and went inside the hospital. The man searched for Sally, but no sign of her. Then, he saw her coming out of the restroom. He went behind Sally and followed her from behind. Sally went inside the room, but as she looked behind to close the door. She saw the man right in front of her eyes. Sally let out a scream, but the man quickly put his hand on her mouth. The man slowly put his hands in his pocket and slowly grabbed a knife. Then, he slit Sally’s throat with one big cut across her throat. Sally suddenly fell on the floor covering with blood. The man stares at her, then put the knife, covered in blood, in his pocket. He slowly walked out of the room and slowly exit the hospital. As he exit the hospital, he comes across a trash can right outside the hospital. He walked over to the trash can and reached into his pocket. He grabbed the knife and throw it in the trash can to hide the evidence. He went over to the car and went inside. As he sat down, he let out a big sigh. Finally, he start the car and begin to drive.
wow! I am speechless! this story was amazing!! I greatly enjoyed reading it and the suspense that was in the setting of the story. you did an excellent job and I can tell you put a lot of effort into this piece. again great job on your work!!!!! ~julianna Alvarado English period 1
ReplyDeleteholy cow that story was crazy. Crazy in a good way though. I really loved how you could kinda see his emotions hiding in the way he acted.
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The suspense that you have in your story is so great!! I loved the subtle way of showing emotion you have the mystery man. And the ending was very shocking
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